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[K-Usher2] 임수진_수업정리+second draft
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 environment2.docx (15.1K) [6] DATE : 2013-11-05 00:02:58 | | environment2수진수정.docx (15.6K) [3] DATE : 2013-11-06 02:00:07 |
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1. this process expands to the wide-range of the general public
-> (수동형으로 바꾸어야함) can be expanded
2. people nowadays are too busy to care
-> (개인적인 예시이므로 구체적 명사를 사용할 것, 과거 경험이므로 시제 조심할것) my neighbor were
3. they actually do recycle roughly, so the trasches are all around the apartment
-> (시제) did , were
4. neighbor started to recycle carefully
-> (단어선택) almost every residents started to recycle
5. this will result in changing other people's action
-> (body2의 마지막 문장이므로 주제와 연결지어 마무리 할것) in resolving environmental problems.
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