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[K-Usher2] 임수진_수업정리+second draft
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 1105임수진_childrenchoice2.docx (16.4K) [4] DATE : 2013-11-06 19:22:07 |
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1. right decisions, most helpful advice
-> 관사 the를 꼭 붙여야 함(최상급인데 왜안붙였냐)
2. mutual conception of decision process
-> mutual은 필요없는 단어. the decision making progress 로 바꿔야 함
3. children who need to be learned
-> 수동으로 굳이 쓸 필요 없는 문장이었음 need to learn
4. against my parents who wanted to let me went abroad
-> against the decision of my parents 로 간결하게 바꿀것
5. 추가 문장
: since the experience of studying abroad hepled me to broaden my outlook
(예시에서 왜 부모님의 결정이 내게 도움이 되었는지 명확한 논리 드러나지 않음)
6. not want to be broke my bf
-> 왜 또 수동 쓰니. 전치사 필요 not want to break up with my bf
6. listen carefully what their parents talk to
-> to 추가, talk를 say로 바꿈(why?????)
7. various happening -> various happenings
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