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[Intro]: Spending money on traveling and vacation is better than saving it for future use.

[Body I]

TS: Spending money on traveling and vacation can relieve one’s stress.

SS1: Stressful life can cause dissatisfaction which directly affects happiness. (부정적 방향 안돼)

SS2: Therefore, to avoid stressful life, people can reduce stress by their own ways and become delightful.

[Body II]

TS: Traveling and having vacation help widen one's perspective. (while saving money does not뒤로 내리기)

SS: By traveling, people can go through various experiences and can learn about understanding others.