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작성일 : 16-08-01 19:31
[주니어] [H-2반 여름특강 3차] 박성주 & 홍현기
 글쓴이 : 홍현기 (183.♡.90.46)
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The question as to whether movies and television have negative effects on young people or not has been a constant debate in the field of education. In reality, a majority of students tends to argue that movies and television do not have any negative effects. However, I strongly believe that movies and television have negative effects on young people.

First of all, the movies and television use violent and stimulating contents to gain people’s attention. In order to gain people’s attention, they use inappropriate words and actions, because they get paid for their popularity. Young people imitate what they saw or use inappropriate words from the movies and television they watched. For example, when I was in high school, most of my classmates watched a hero movie that had violent contents. My classmates imitated the actions they had watched, which made many people get hurt. This example clearly shows that movies and television evoke young people to use inappropriate things that they have watched from movies and television.

Secondly, watching movies and television makes young people unhealthier and lazier. As young people start to watch movies and television, they will eventually refuse to go out and do healthy activities, because just sitting and watching is comfortable and addictive. For example, when I was in high school, my friend who was very active became overweight since he started watching dramas and movies and never did any exercise anymore. This example clearly shows that movies and television make young people unhealthier and lazier.


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전주한 16-08-01 19:36
 183.♡.90.46  
just sitting and watching is
just sitting and watching are
     
홍현기 16-08-01 20:07
 183.♡.90.46  
The question as to whether movies and television have negative effects on young people or not has been a constant debate in the field of education. In reality, a majority of students tends to argue that movies and television do not have any negative effects. However, I strongly believe that movies and television have negative effects on young people.

First of all, the movies and television use violent and stimulating contents to gain people’s attention. In order to gain people’s attention, they use inappropriate words and actions, because they get paid for their popularity. Young people imitate what they saw or use inappropriate words from the movies and television they watched. For example, when I was in high school, most of my classmates watched a hero movie that had violent contents. My classmates imitated the actions they had watched, which made many people get hurt. This example clearly shows that movies and television evoke young people to use inappropriate things that they have watched from movies and television.

Secondly, watching movies and television makes young people unhealthier and lazier. As young people start to watch movies and television, they will eventually refuse to go out and do healthy activities, because just sitting and watching are comfortable and addictive. For example, when I was in high school, my friend who was very active became overweight since he started watching dramas and movies and never did any exercise anymore. This example clearly shows that movies and television make young people unhealthier and lazier.
반상훈 16-08-01 20:11
 59.♡.34.42  
started watching

start 는 무조건 to v 로 받아야함
 
started to watch
     
홍현기 16-08-01 20:12
 183.♡.90.46  
The question as to whether movies and television have negative effects on young people or not has been a constant debate in the field of education. In reality, a majority of students tends to argue that movies and television do not have any negative effects. However, I strongly believe that movies and television have negative effects on young people.

First of all, the movies and television use violent and stimulating contents to gain people’s attention. In order to gain people’s attention, they use inappropriate words and actions, because they get paid for their popularity. Young people imitate what they saw or use inappropriate words from the movies and television they watched. For example, when I was in high school, most of my classmates watched a hero movie that had violent contents. My classmates imitated the actions they had watched, which made many people get hurt. This example clearly shows that movies and television evoke young people to use inappropriate things that they have watched from movies and television.

Secondly, watching movies and television makes young people unhealthier and lazier. As young people start to watch movies and television, they will eventually refuse to go out and do healthy activities, because just sitting and watching are comfortable and addictive. For example, when I was in high school, my friend who was very active became overweight since he started to watch dramas and movies and never did any exercise anymore. This example clearly shows that movies and television make young people unhealthier and lazier.
엄진주 16-08-01 20:15
 59.♡.34.42  
they use inappropriate words and actions
they -> movies and television

which made many people get hurt
which made many people injured

이렇게 바꾸는게 좋을 거 같아~

evoke young people to use inappropriate things
things가 정확히 뭐야?
     
박경태 16-08-01 20:23
 59.♡.34.42  
which made many people 'to' get hurt
     
홍현기 16-08-01 20:24
 183.♡.90.46  
참고하겠습니다~
Things가 여기서는 부적절한 말이나 행동 등이 되겠습니다. ^^
          
엄진주 16-08-01 20:31
 59.♡.34.42  
아하~그래그래 things가 정확히 뭔지 몰랐어ㅎ
 
 

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