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Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit?

¡¡¡¡¡Ü to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community

¡¡¡¡¡Ü learning to play a sport

¡¡¡¡¡Ü learning to play a musical instrument


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°­½Åö 18-08-28 18:37
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To begin with, young people should accumulate work experience because
     
°­½Åö 18-08-29 20:10
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To begin with, young people should accumulate work experience because young people need to improve their ability to work. As long as young people can improve their ability, people will do better at the future job. To do better at the future, accumulating work experience is crucial for young people.

In addition, accumulating work experience is better for young people because young people can know many people at different sectors. In that people cannot live alone in modern society, young people need to develop their network in various field. As network will help people at any occasion, young people should accumulate work experience.
±Ç±âÇö 18-08-28 18:39
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To begin with, it is important for young people to accmulate work experience because
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to begin with, it is important for young people to learn a sport because young people can improve their health. In that they can improve their health, they can be in a great shape and feel more energetic than ever before. To be in a great shape and feel more energetic, it is important for young people to learn a sport.

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for example, last year I joined a bicycle rider's club.The members used the bicycles to improve their health, and did also. While I was riding a bike, I was able to be in a great shape and feel more energetic than ever before. So I could improve my health by riding a bike.

in addition, learning a sport for young people is crucial because they can relieve their stress by playing a sport. As long as young people are relieving their stress, they can make many great memories about it. To make a lot of great memories, learning a sport for young people is crucial.
ÁÖ¼­¿¬ 18-08-28 18:39
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To begin with, young people should learn to play a sport because playing a sport can relieve people's stress. In that people can relieve stress by playing a sport, they can live a happier life. Regarding happiness, young people should learn to play a sport in their free time.

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ÁÖ¼­¿¬ 18-08-29 11:01
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In addition, it is crucial for young people to play a sport in their free time because people can get heathier. As people can get healthier,
Á¶¿¹ºó 18-08-28 18:39
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To begin with, it is important to accumulate work experience by a part-time job because

companies will hire people with experience.
±èÁö¼ö 18-08-28 18:41
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To begin with, it is important to learn to play sports because playing sport is the best way to relieve stress.
     
±èÁö¼ö 18-08-29 13:55
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To begin with, it is important to learn to play sports because playing sport is the best way to relieve stress.In that young people relieve stress, they can live their life more happily. To live their life happily they should play sports.

In addition, playing a sport is crucial because it helps them become healthy. As long as they are healthy, the are in a good shape and feel more energetic. To be in a good shape and feel more energetic, they should play a sport.
ż­¿¬ 18-08-28 18:42
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To begin with, It is important for some young people to learn to play a sport because
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I think learning to play sports brings the most benefits to people.
To begin with, there is a tendency to consider sporting pursuits  as merely recreational, but I am of the opinion that sports are far more important than that. First of all, sports help instill good habits and important vital skills. Participating in a sporting activity requires a big commitment in time and effort, with hours spent on training and competing. This teaches athlete to be disciplined and focused, which are also important  skills in daily life.
Secondly, playing sports teaches people how to win and lose with dignity. this is very useful for helping people deal with situations that occur in real life too. for instance, in sports, the final result often goes against a team or individual because of a piece of bad luck or a poor umpiring call. the athletes simply have to accept the outcome, even it's considered unfair. these types of experiences prepare them better to deal with disappointments and difficulties they face in dailt life. that's why i believe learning sports brings us the most benefits
 
 

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